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Saaam. :D Here is your promised review. So I thought this story was really cool and creepy. You had good ideas and really play up the atmosphere. The last line ...

Hey Ninja! Sorry this took so long. Anyway, here is your promised review. You got third place simply because of how fun this piece is. While it's not the most ...

In regards to switching to the metric system, it probably wouldn't work. In America, we have a great deal of people of people, all of whom are very dependent on ...

Hey, Lava. So, I really liked this piece. It had a very interesting premise and I liked your word choice and pace throughout. For something so short we really get ...

Hi, Sweeney! Welcome to YWS! :) First, I want to say something about the formatting of this piece. Right now, it's hard to read since it's all one big chunk ...

Hi, So this piece didn't really make feel anything. It didn't because I didn't really feel anything for your character, seeing as how you don't really develop her well. Alright, ...

Hi. First, please proofread your story to check for grammatical and spelling errors before it is posted. It shouldn't be hard; if you use Microsoft Word or Open Office there ...

Sam! You have to tell me when you post these things so that I can review them. You know I will, right? For the most part, I agree with Hannah ...

Hi Kit, So, I thought this was cute. It had a nice flow and rhythm to it, but I think it could be better. What little imagery that you have ...

Hey again Red. So, I pretty much agree with wickedwonder. The father just doesn't feel realistic in this little snippet at all. I can understand him being mad, but calling ...

Hello. For the most part I agree with with wickedwonder. Alright, so your MC may be going through a rough time right now. But her friends and family are just ...

Hey! So, okay. I thought that this was a really neat little story. It's definitely not bad, and I especially love your language and imagery and the way that you ...

Hi, Before I begin the review, I just wanted to mention something minor about grammar. Make sure you run a spell check through your work before posting it! I noticed ...

Hi! So, I think this was a cute little poem. It's definitely well-written and very simple, which is the kind of narrative that I really like. You've covered an idea ...

Hello. If I could describe this story in one word, it would be emptiness. There's not really much that I feel or am attached to throughout the course of this. ...