Elinor

You lost me when you mentioned the vampires and werewolves. When I first started reading this I thought that this would be a fairly realistic story, so when you mention ...

Hi adelina! I didn't read your first chapter, so I'm going to review this based off the context that you've provided in solely this. I don't know I can really ...

Hi alfred! This is really cute. Even though Christmas is over, it still very much feels like the holiday season to me- where I live, we just got a huge ...

I found this hard to get into. While you have a flicker of an idea here, I was distracted by two main setbacks. The first is your grammar and spelling. ...

I'm not really sure what you were going for here. You keep referring to "lovely", but I didn't get anything else out of it, really. You really cram in a ...

I'm not really sure what to say. Firstly, I apologize for making you wait so long to hear my thoughts on this story. I've underestimated you as a writer. You ...

Hi there! So I thought this was interesting. I don't see a lot of non-fiction pieces on this website, especially not ones that grab me as this did, so bravo ...

Hi Lauren, So, I haven't come across much of your writing before and I will admit that this was a real pleasure to read. You definitely a very talented author! ...

So, as I was reading your piece, I'll admit that it took me a little while to realize that the lake was the narrator of this piece. And I'll admit, ...

Hi. So, as someone who's watched a lot of short films this past semester for French class, I was trying to imagine this as a short film and I can't. ...

Hi, I think that this definitely starts off very well. I'm a huge fan of ominous dystopias and totalitarian governments; stuff like the Twilight Zone and the Giver. I thought ...

Hi, Macy! This is cool! The twist is sad, but I think it's interesting, considering you wrote about one of the most glaring plot holes of the Cinderella fairy tale. ...

Hi there! This is a pretty interesting piece. I think you have a really neat style and you did a good job giving this an ominous an eerie tone. Despite ...

Hello there! Welcome to YWS! I think that you have a good start with this. The idea is intriguing and I think that you can end up in a pretty ...

Hi there! So, I'm not sure what this is supposed to be, or what kind of story you're trying to tell. If your aim is to make me guess what ...