Elelel

Ok, I was just browsing this thread and my brother wandered in. He read a few posts and got into the spirit of things. I think he has somethings he ...

You should always keep going! If you're enjoying writing it, don't bother too much whether or not other people think it's worthwhile. At the very least you'll get practice. So ...

Hello again! So this newest story of mine hasn't gotten too many positive reviews, and I debated on not posting it at all, but I'm hoping that the further the ...

Hey! Believe it or not I just wrote out heaps of stuff and then accidentally hit "back" and had it all disappear on me. Very annoying, but never fear, I ...

I had never heard of it until my mum randomly found it on a shelf in a B&B we stayed at in africa. But I read it, and I quite ...

Hehe! It amuses me. I remember those pony things. I was never really a fan, but they beat Barbie. The only Barbie that was interesting was Pregnant Barbie, and that ...

Hey! 'Tis I! I found some time! Homework is just the worst, isn't it? But anyway, on to business. The early-day sun shone weakly down into the streets of the ...

Loved it! Loved it! *dances around* It is officially my favourite HP book! I can't BELEIVE we're on the four page of discussion and no one has said anything about ...

Intersting start! You're getting me quite involved in your story, which is always a good thing. [Quote deleted at original author's request] Ok, let's have a look at this paragraph. ...

YAY!!! I love the books. When my friend first told me to read them, I didn't want to because he used the words "You'lll love them" which always make me ...

Short, sharp and shiny. Me likes! You're pretty good at getting the description to seem all natural and part of the story. Maybe in the future try and work in ...

Spaces between the paragraphs would certainly make this easier to read. A huge block of writing can be rather intimidating. But I won't make you do that before I critique ...

Hello Skell! I did enjoy reading your story. It's a good start for a story. Lots of lovely conflict and stuff. One thing I noticed about your grammar is that ...

Hello! I'm El. I will be your critiquer this ... evening? Does 4:10pm rate as evening? Anyway, welcome! Once Upon a Time... Yep, you guessed it: In a Far Off ...

1. Eragon or Harry (as heroes)? Harry. Ergon annoys me a bit. Harry has his sulky moments where I get a bit fed up with him, but I get sick ...