Elelel

No, it made sense to me. So god finally granted your wish, With the kiss of love, Forever and always, Goodbye. This is lovely! I love this ending! :D

I think this might do well as a poem, if you like writing poems that is. But that's really up to you, it's just my opinion. Well, apart from that... ...

Hey! I read that in your signature earlier! It seemed ... deep it could relate to it, although it's probably not for the same reason that inspired it. It seems ...

I was crying half way through that poem. Make her cry, let me cry, Let me say good-bye, But how can I till I know why, Tell me why she ...

I'm with Crysi, it's not your best, but with a little work it could be better than it is. Your anger probably separated yourself from the poem, the poem's sort ...

I know what it's talking about, I can't really explain it, I just do. I like it, not as good as Shadow Walkers, your going to have a tough time ...

Does it become more fantasy like further into the story? I like what you've done so far. You've made Diego and the game intriguing by not explaining much about them. ...

Oh I like it! It is interesting! Editing is required though, I hate saying it too but *sigh* someone has to I suppose. You could descibe Death's voice, because it ...

You're poet too Crysi! :D It does describe writing really well! A little shorter might have been a bit better (school :roll:)

In that 4th paragraph, where everyone's talking and moving n stuff, I got a bit lost at a glance as to who's saying what. :( Can you break that up ...

Nice! :D The flow is consistent and I love the Emporer's New Groove!!! Heheheh! (sorry, had to say it) :lol:

Interesting! And amusing! It's really good, there are a few places that could use work, but overall it's good. It was well aranged with her thoughts, and his conversation... though ...

Did you think up werewisps? I like the sound of them! Very... interesting. There were a few bits in there where I wasn't ntirely sure who was talking: “Wow, she ...

Put it back! I liked it! (as said before) NEVER give in to people saying your work is bad. NEVER. Whenever anyone says my work is bad I just mentally ...

I like this! I know what you're talking about to, I have a long list of friends who do not understand writing. Maybe this line: "Crumpled, belittled, and destroyed – ...