Eimear

Hey. This is a subtly brilliant piece. I really did love what I read. If I'm right in saying it's about light slowly gathering and draining during the day, every ...

Grr! What it is? Hehe, I too quite liked this, once you get over the punctuation problems ect. It's a first draft, I know- but a good, and esstential habit ...

The idea of this poem was good, but you really do need to polish up your work before posting it, as it took away from it and made me not ...

I often think, that through negative suggestion that people try so hard not to make their work cliched or well-worn that the end result is just that. In this poem, ...

Hmmm...yes indeed, I liked it. Hold on, lets just go all out here- count me as one of the reviewers who adored it. You might find it helpful to print ...

Hey Jesse. Enjoying YWS? So this poem didn't really wow me. In my head, I knew the concept and word choice was alright, but I failed in my heart to ...

I don't know if you've heard this before, but your writing is strangely addictive. It demanded to be read. That is a VERY good thing. So I loved this. The ...

Tut, tut, tut. Writing poems when you should be paying attention in class. I suppose people in glass houses shouldn't throw stones though, I'm suppose to be studying! So good ...

I agree with changing the title. Show, don't tell. I'll try and think if an alternative if you'd like. Otherwise, I enjoyed this. It spoke to me. Maybe this is ...

I agree, 'pissed' is pretty funny. But also very real, and raw- like what true love in the real world is like. There's not hearts and roses, there's frustration, long ...

Hey, and welcome to YWS! It's a great place for us writers to come and post work, critque or just relax. I hope you settle in well. So it thought ...

Okies, I'm going to be honest because that's what I would expect from another writer and that's what you deserve. You have talent. And, it seems a kind of creative ...

Haha. I admire your nerve in not doing stuff until the last minute. It reminds me fondly of myself. A real trait in a true writer. All that said...sometimes poetry ...

The overall concept of writing or leaving a letter to an ex through poetry sounds pretty cool. I'm sure they'd be sorry when they see how good you are. Hehe. ...

I'm going to skim over the structural content and issue with commas in this work. In any case, the others before me have pointed it out and I'm taking into ...