Ego

That may be the end actually....I mean, how is he possibly going to cut through dozens of orcs!? He's only one elf (a SYLVAN ELF :wink:) after all!

Just FYI, the scenery is irrelevant, but the man is important, so I'll fix that.

OOOO....I love the Scottish sounds so cool out loud! The p;oem itself does have a really dreamy sound to it....makes me more drowsy than I already am! (in a good ...

"Within the gun case laid another barrel, this one longer and fitted with a silencer." It's there; he only fired once in the whole thing and killed only one person. ...

There really aren't that many...if any. However, I did notice that Robert saw a CAVE, and they came across a CLEARING. Not important, but still inconsistent. oh yeah, write more. ...

omg, when I first saw this I was like, DON'T GO TARA!!!!!! but then I read the poem lol take all that's been said already, paste it in my post, ...

no confusion at all!? check your gmail account or get on the YWS chat.

No one is responding with their confusions...I wish they would....please everybody? As soon as I know what's confusing, I can fix it and begin writing again. This includes anything you ...

Confused, but I'm sure it will pan out eventually :wink: great job and keep it up!

Do it and I shall be here to eagerly await its return.

if cliche's were done like this more often, I wouldn't mind them nearly as much!

that's some good vocabulary and grammar for an 8 year old!

I'd prefer not to post any more until I know the confusion, becuase if it's not fixed now it will only deepen with further reading...unless you don't mind being confused ...

I know how that is. Character development is hard. Sorry, I got pretty behind on this story. I like it so far, and it's pretty good. for some reason, I'l ...

you can't just say something like that and not explain!!! What are you confused about? I need to know...this is exactly what I need to work on! Anything that seems ...