Duskglimmer

I liked this alot. It flowed nicely and was short and sweet. Very nicely done. I do have just a few things having to do with grammatics though: Her laughter ...

One question: who is Nessy? One statement: generally when a piece requires an explanation at the bottom, there's something missing from the actual writing. One comment: having the line "Time ...

Honestly, as it is now, it doesn't sound very emo. It sounds humorous... or at least it made me smile. If you didn't want it to sound that way, I'm ...

I really don't have many comments to make other than what other people have already said. This idea, though forbidden, was very tempting. The rule of the Shiana was stay ...

This could be greatly improved by just fixing the spelling and grammar mistakes and by adding in the missing puncuation. Besides that, the emotions of the piece seem like they're ...

First off, let me just start by saying that I enjoyed it. I think it was nicely done, but I do have a few comments. I think you added a ...

I have to agree with what Griffinkeeper said... you move far too fast. You tell alot of things without showing the reader anything to support them. You say that Amala ...

You fixed alot of the things that I had pointed out before, but there's still a few things that I think are rather glaring... (like the comment of being able ...

I was forced to read it for school. The actual writing of it was phonemonal (sp?). I love the style tha Tolstoy wrote in. But the style was the only ...

This something I wrote in like one minute and thought it up in less time, so please be gentle. This is the prologue. lol. gentle. right. My biggest complaint with ...

My only real picky question: can a rainbow truly "glare"? If you make the glare the noun and have it being described by the word "rainbow", then yes. Is that ...

I have to admit, you really caught my attention with the title. lol. “Anyone sitting here?” you laugh, your voice dripping with mockery. You take a seat without waiting for ...

Honestly, the opening (ie the first two lines) reminded me of Avril's Sk8ter Boi, and I got a little hung up on that *curses her obsessive mind* But I liked ...

Back on the topic of the poem: I liked it. I thought I wasn't just because of the opening line, but it turned into something different than I thought it ...

I don't have much of a critique for this. Nothing really jumped out at me except for: Why is there no one to tell me I’ll be fine No God ...