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Hey! :) A few things: Blinking angrily, I took one last look at the eternal darkness outside; slightly frostbitten trees and fields glistening eerily white in the full moon; with ...

Hello! Just a few nitpicks, and then I'll get to my overall impressions: . When she does, she's wearing only black. ~ "When she is outside, she's wearing only black." ...

Hey, I think you've got a great storyline going and I look forward to seeing what you write next. I would say, however, (and this is just my personal opinion) ...

#1: Some nitpicky things that I found. A lot of this is just stylistic and my personal opinion, if you don't like it you don't have to use it, it's ...

Just one little thing before I get to the lovely kissing: She tried to scream, but her vocal cords wouldn't seem to work. Perhaps change "wouldn't" to "couldn't"? Now that ...

#1, I loved this! Perfect little snippet of what I think will turn out to be an awesome story! Let me know if you post more :) #2, There were ...

Hello! First of all, I love your writing. It's so vivid. "light spreading like liquid throughout the pink, cotton candy clouds." Ah. I also loved this exchange: "I laughed too ...

Hello! I love the way you write! Fluently and simply, nicely worded and eloquent. Good job! One little thing I have to say though is that the NAMES in this ...

Not going to get into nitpicks because I think the other reviewers have that covered. I did, however, really like it :) Yeah, it was confusing and I didn’t really ...

I found a bunch of nitpicky things just in the first few paragraphs, so I didn't try to list them. You've got an intriguing story, but it definitely needs work. ...

A few nitpicky things: :smt001 - "He could barely breath out of nervousness and the little breath he did get was filled with the smoke from the cigar that the ...

Don't look away. Don't hide from me. I want to be near you. I can hear you breath, say something to me. I hear your chest heave, don't be scared ...

Helloo. I really liked it. The imagery is beautiful, the wording/phrasing is lovely as well. The only thing is that it started off kind of sudden... and I understand what ...

This is so beautiful... I just lost myself in it. You've inspired me to write something, and I think that's the most fantastic thing I writer can do: inspire other ...