Derek

I loved this series. I remember pre-ordering and waiting for each book to come out. They fit very nicely together and each one offers something new to the table increasing ...

Really this doesn't belong in this section. Maybe Fiction Discussion and Tips. If you need writing help or advice, ask around. I may not be the best person, but many ...

I enjoyed reading this. Your description skills are quite good. I could really see it in my head as I read and it was a struggle to do so. I ...

Yes you should definitely make it flow better. Right now it's just kind of words put together in a giant paragraph. Even though rhyming isn't necessary for a poem it ...

I like it. Sounds like a real song you'd hear on the radio. Probably even one I'd listen to. The only thing I think you could change is. Why not ...

Very nice. I enjoy how after reading it, and realize your writing about waking up in the morning and it all makes sense. It's very creative. I noticed a few ...

You have to write some more on this. It's caught me already. I like your writing style a lot. Very descriptive in such a way that it really pulls you ...

I was clueless back then. I can’t believe I did half the things that I did. But I would not want to redo it. “Why?” you may ask? Because if ...

I dont know much about Pears? but i dont think their Golden XD. Its good and the methopors match but i just dont think that it decribes a Pear? I ...

Yikes, so many grammar mistakes lol Well I'll help you fix them! luchladies This would be 2 words, lunch ladies gradeschoolers Would be grade-schoolers fix all of those, there are ...

Chocoholic I'm going to have to disagree with you It was a short story so it wont be a book or anything It was just to show of his writing ...

Yes this is a small portion of the book I hate it when people tell me they wanna know more about my characters I mean its only the first chapter? ...

I'm probably repeating stuff but a who care ;) Oh god, why dose my head feel like it was beaten in with a bat? I thought as I opened my ...

Chapter one ~blood lies~ Anaya sat on the man, the corpse that once had been a live, until she ripped her teeth into his throat, tearing his flesh to threads. ...

Ha first review!!!! hmmmm hmmmm nope i dont see anything but maybe its cause it's 3:33 and i'm tired haha well it was good considering yes it was very short ...