Demeter

So... it's my first song I've read in YWS and I have to say I almost love it! :) Almost, because I can't really decide whether I like this very ...

It's really good considering you wrote in such a short time! It was beautiful, and like Bittersweet said, really cute, too. I especially liked the title and the last line. ...

Hello. The idea is sort of cool (ha!) but I think you should bring something even newer to it. I feel like I've heard this before. The stanzas not being ...

Hi. I saw there were no reviews yet so I decided to read the piece and review it. The overall expression for me is that it kind of hits the ...

Okay, here I am! :) I got very interested as soon as I saw the title. It was funny. But it made me think this poem would be more about ...

Hi! Okay, here are my opinions of this piece. The first thing that got me is the rhyming. It wasn't that sharp in all the stanzas, and also, I think, ...

Hey there! First of all I would like to congratulate you for a title so catchy I wanted to get to the poem right away. "Your eyes are jazz," --> ...

I totally agree with Sela. If you don't tell us what the mission is, what's the point of this story? To tell that Alex Rider has a sister? It seemed ...

Hmmm, not bad at all. It's nicely written and the reader won't get bored. I didn't really spot any mistakes except for this: "Alex Rider and Sabrina" --> shouldn't it ...

This is cool. "Brisk girls with rosy cheeks bow their heads, roll up sleeves." I like this part because it flows nicely and is fun to say. I like also ...

Looks like someone is inspired by Jane Austen... ;) The title and Elizabeth... I suppose this takes place in the same time as Austen's (or that's how I felt) so ...

This was OK. One thing that really disturbed me was the weird space thing. So they are in Jupiter? It's more of a sci-fi for me. And you didn't really ...

Hey E :) You remember when I told you it's hard for me to review your work? Well, I can proudly say that I've figured out the reason: They're so ...

Yep, I also think you shouldn't capitalize all the words, that doesn't fit in. This was also a bit too gloomy for me. "Build Me Up To Break Me Down," ...

Good job. I liked it how you took a commonly known poem and transformed it as your own. I liked the first two lines because even though they're not your ...