Demeter

Hey, Shubhi! At first I was going to review the prologue, but I decided to do this one instead as I saw this had fewer reviews. That said, I haven't ...

Anzius! It's been somewhat forever, has it not? I felt like this song was a bit all over the place. It probably works alright, given the theme of the song, ...

Hi Halycon! Here by request! So what I think is that this poem got better toward the end. The beginning stanza was a little... boring, even, because even though it ...

Hey Stori, finally here. So, I actually prefer this to the one I originally read and whose review YWS ate after I had finished it. This one was more interesting, ...

Hi Bubble! So one thing that stood out for me in this prologue was the amount of telling you did. Instead of showing the reader how a character makes their ...

Blinky! At last you have something new. I would've got to this sooner, but you know, Freud was holding me hostage. So, I read this poem a few times, and ...

Hey, Hippie! In haikus, rhyming isn't really used. This of course doesn't mean that you couldn't use it, but haikus being really short poems, rhymes can be too much. The ...

Hi, Valentine, here as you requested. Now, obviously I haven't read the previous chapters, so I'll just say whatever came to my mind when I was reading this. This really ...

Hi there, Kim! Here as you requested =) A rhyming poem! Overall you did a neat job on it. There were some places where the rhymes felt kind of forced, ...

Mattoo! I decided to give you a reviewoo! First of all, I really like how you molded the theme, or the subject, into the poem. It's a perfect example of ...

Hey, Shubhi! Here as requested. =) The idea you had here (mainly the Melanie/Jemima confusion) seems fairly interesting and something that would be fun to read when executed well. So ...

Hi Tori! I love haiku, so I was glad to notice this thread. A summer twister Crushing a evening's silence Everything is dead. To me, this doesn't create a consistent ...

Hey Foxfire! So sorry I wasn't here sooner. I have to tell you that while the idea behind the story seems fairly interesting, a lot of the time I was ...

Hi Snoink! I'm Demeter! I'm going to be your reviewer today. He looked at the sea Which sea? The Pacific? The Indian Ocean? And who is he? You need to ...

Hey Otaku, here as you requested. =) I'm going to be completely honest with you and say that I found quite difficult to focus on the text. I believe this ...