Demeter

Gal, I'll be perfectly honest with you. Not once in my life of writing have I come across with something equally stimulating as this. Every inch of this piece oozes ...

Hey Elinor, sorry for not getting on this any sooner! I liked how you set this in a world that is already familiar for some of the readers, and that ...

Hi Arris! I'm so so so sorry for not getting to this sooner, I feel bad. =( She was engaged with Ezra Pound Engaged to, it should be. In 1905, ...

Ed! So sorry for not doing this earlier. :) Sunlight treads on midnight blue paths to new leaves of green, to barks of brown and animals of shade. The description ...

Hey there, DM! Thanks for posting in my thread :) Let's see some nit-picks first. Luke held the guns close to his chest, his heart-rate rapid and his breath slow ...

Hi, Jemjive! First of all, you can safely scratch the disclaimer in the beginning. Don't want to make it too easy for the readers, eh? :P I quite like the ...

Hi, Bubblegum! Here I am :) Somehow I have to say that I liked the emotionless, matter-of-fact narration. It goes well along with the fact that the narrator has lost ...

Hi, Sura! Sorry for not getting back to you earlier. When the blackest bile precedes your being a wicked call comes hence singing I like the opening line. "Precede" is ...

Hi, Amnien! Thanks for posting on my thread, and sorry for not getting back to you sooner. I think it's a crime that us orphans still have to go to ...

Hi, Arris! I also prefer this one to the first one! In fact, I quite liked this! I sort of kind of loved the little rhyming thing you had going ...

Hi, Arris! You have quite a lot of repetition here -- I think that "the dust dawn morning" works well in both the beginning and ending keeping the poem together, ...

Hi, Ben! Well, I think I read in your blog that you wrote this for a special someone. That is lovely, and I'm certain it got her the way you ...

Hey, Brainy, here as you requested. :) I like the image in the ending a lot. However, this is an edited version, and having skimmed the reviews other people have ...

Hi, Hannah! Here I am! Nah, nothing should ever be scrapped. And even if something should, this shouldn't. I kind of like this as it is -- while it would ...

Hi, Hannah, here I am as you asked me to. I don't know how qualified I am to try to review this, because there's only so much for me to ...