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Hey DragonGirl! Just logged back into YWS for the first time in a while and saw you posted some new pieces. I was told by your profile that I must ...

Hey Sillia, I enjoyed reading your prose because the pace of your work balanced both description and action. Personally, I most enjoyed listening to Emra's thoughts throughout the piece; they ...

Hey! So I'm here to review, and thus I'm gonna jump right in. Just know before hand that I didn't read the original version, so I do not have any ...

I'm also around your age and I'm used to cursing and everything, especially on a regular basis. Only problem is I've found this isn't really the site to show off ...

At first I was wondering how the style you presented the story in was going to work, but after reading it all I can confidentaly say that it did work ...

Apart from the corrections that everyone else made I don't have much to say. The only comment I have is that it is really short. Also if I dreamed this ...

Hi Psudiname, My name is Ben and I'll try to set you off in the right direction. First I really enjoyed concept and depiction of the setting. I enjoy raid ...

Definitely a lot more here than your prologue which makes me happy. First problem for me was how did the prologue relate to this at all? I'm not too worried ...

Hey, here are a few of my opinions. First I thought that is seemed a little vague overall. I'm known to say this a lot on prologue reviews, but I ...

Sup? here's a small review I'm no grammatical genius so any punctuation error corrections won't come from me. Since you asked for the truth I'll definitely give it too you. ...

you've definitely got something going on here. I really liked the way that the dialog was worded, because it seemed really natural. Characters were well described and seem to have ...

Just thought I would say it would be really cool if maybe for the first chapter you did it audiobook style but with pictures like you did there. Basically you ...

I keep feeling that you have something missing. Your ideas are great but you don't seem to describe them in the best way. I again advise you to enhance your ...

I agree Jash in that reviewers are meant to point out or COMMENT on something concerning the story. Whether the author chooses to take that advice/comment is up to them. ...

Like Soulkana said the poem is really deep, in that it is strewn with emotions. One awesome thing is that those emotions are driven automatically from the flow and word ...