Davidude

Hello! I liked your story, it was a good scifi tale with a twist, but you can also tell it wasn't intensively planned or revised. no problem with that; I'll ...

Hey, nice work! I'll start by summarizing my thoughts. I was very impressed by the ideas in this piece and the strong main character. I was also impressed by the ...

A few technical things: You change the spelling of ethel to ethil. you spell younger yonger you spell guides guids Alright (as in OK) is not spelt 'All right'. And ...

AAAHHH! nice ending. I liked this. Nice build up of tension throughout. The contrast of normal life and the mystery surrounding the zombies worked well. And you spliced in a ...

Hello, Sakura has covered most technical aspects that I noticed, so I'm going to make some subjective comments. Do with them as you will. I found I related to the ...

I really liked this poem, even if it was a bit dark. It really made me feel the emotions of the main character, because you showed them by describing the ...

Couple of things to add: I'm pretty sure it's aeroplanes, not airplanes or air planes, but maybe thats a UK thing. You wrote "showing of" when i think you meant ...

I'll give my general thoughts first and then move onto individual grammar and spelling issues. I enjoyed this story. the first few lines drew me in; I was immediately presented ...

just noticed some errors in the corrections you got. people starting running... try "people started running", probably just a typo, Furthermore, til is incorrect spelling. Until and till mean the ...

This is very very good. Very professional, I can't believe you're only 15! Finish this off and publish! Ok, maybe i'm getting a bit carried away. I have to say, ...

I found this interesting but confusing, as it did not really make complete sense, especially the green bit. You made me feel dim for missing the joke. Apart from that, ...