DarkerSarah

Hey Cal! This was VERY well written, and as I am fascinated by the ocean in any manner, I was interested in it from the beginning. Shadow did a really ...

Hello! I followed the link in Areida's signature to get to this...please don't be intimidated by the length of my review! I'm just trying to help. It's a nice story. ...

It's amazing how a story as dark and twisty as this grabs people's attention so. Luckily for you, I am dark and twisty... The title grabbed my attention right away, ...

Hi, Elizabeth! I don't think I've ever critiqued anything of yours before...I haven't been on in a while, so this was fun for me! I know this is non-fiction, but ...

Ari, your writing has improved leaps and bounds since I last read it. "The wind lifted her hair from her shoulders and it waved in front of her, whipping in ...

I am deeply impressed with this piece of work. You're only sixteen? I think I like this so much because your writing reminds me of my own (which is good, ...

Good job, Areida. Too bad I still don't know what Donald Duck has to do with a boy cat having babies...Did Donald Duck ever have a kitten? *blinkblinkblink* I love ...

Good job, overall. It needs polishing, I think, but if it's part of a novel, then you've definitely got a long way to go without worrying about polishing. :lol: "It ...

Antigone? As in, Oedipus Rex? ... Beautiful work nonetheless. Breathtaking. Except for the part about the trousers. It kind of has a comical feel to it and doesn't fit smoothly ...

Very nice. Has a Pablo Neruda feel to it, only...English...and French. :D My favorite line? "we laughed because we're poets" Love it and I don't know why. You should be ...

W00t, Rei's back! You would make an amazing children's writer, Rei. I know I've already told you that, but you write with such pure simplicity. I actually really enjoyed it. ...

Considering the fact that this is a very immature piece of writing...I actually liked it. Your sentences were run-ons throughout the entire thing, but they worked. I liked the empty, ...

Areida, you totally read my mind about the Dunces. Don't call them Dunces and then not make them in the slightest bit a dunce. And since this guy is obviously ...

Um...I almost did think this was overly descriptive. In writing, generally, less is more. Today it is. "...was this reality, or was it truth?" Reality and truth are too similar ...

I always like your work, Snoink, but I think this was my favorite. I was a little bored at the beginning, but once you introduced the bruise, it got better ...