Cynder

Thanks for the tips! I'm glad you liked it! It would probably help the poem read better if I formatted it, so I'll try that. Really appreciate the review. :)

It had to be a melancholy song. XD Thank you so much. Other people have suggested the same thing, so I'll do my best. :)

I appreciate it! It is personal, but I like the idea of specifics. If you can give me some examples, I'd be happy to try them. Thanks so much. :)

Whatever man, it's your choice! I loved it in any case, so again, well done!!

I'm just glad I helped. Notify me of any new works of yours, yeah? I can't wait to see more! :)

Haha, thanks everybody! Honestly, I'm pretty gosh darn happy with it. I appreciate all the criticisms though, so everybody is welcome to keep them coming! If anyone has any ideas ...

Thanks! I'll go back and fix that and see what I can do to make it clearer. :)

I edited just the beginning, what do you think? ~Thanks :)

I appreciate your review! It totally wasn't what I expected, but I think that's a good thing. You seem like you really put effort into the review, and for that ...

The bold was because it annoys me when I type it XD I just want to be able to see them better. My poem is meant to be free verse, ...

Thanks :D

I was using the phrase "the next day" as non-literal. I meant more like; I'm not gonna have this new family after this long just to lose them so soon. ...

No you're right, Wolfare XD I will clear it up, I'm editing the seventh chapter still, I've had a lot going on lately, but yes... I understand your points. I'm ...

My goodness, thank you so much!! Actually, I got some personal tips from wolfie too, and I'm currently in the process of editing this chapter. What I have trouble on, ...

Don't mention it. :)