CuteBalletDancer7

Hello, I'm CuteBalletDancer7 Ohhh(: I really like this poem! I thought that the poem has a nice flow to it and great word choice. I think my favorite lines are: ...

Hello! I liked your poem. It has great emotion. However, the flow is interrupted many times throughout the poem. One that stood out the most was: It looks like you ...

Hello there! I really enjoyed your poem. It has a nice flow to it and everything else seems to be pointed out already. One thing I do want to say ...

Hello there(: I'm CuteBalletDancer7 I thought this was a really cute story. There was a clear beginning, middle, and end, so points for you! But, I would say to add ...

Hello(: Well I'm a sucker for Romeo and Juliet, haha, but I thought this was good. I like how I didn't know who or what was really going on in ...

Hello there. This was good, but needs a tad more work on it. The second and third sentence could be one sentence so that you do not repeat "I had." ...

Wow(: This was beautiful. I keep on wanting to read more and it gave me great images. I could see the ocean and how beautiful it was. It was a ...

(: I really enjoyed reading this. It had lots of emotion and love in it. I thought the repeated words worked well and add a poetic style to the story. ...

Hello there (: Well, to start off, this was a very nice poem with a good story. It was pretty easy to follow along. A few pointers though will be ...

(: I really enjoyed this work of art. I say art because it painted a picture of magic, if magic can be painted. It has nice flow and lightness ( ...

Ohhh(: I really like this. Right off I was interested. I believe your use of repetition was effective, but not overused. It gave it rhythm. Maybe, I'm not the best ...

Hello there (: First off, your poem is so true, at least in my eyes it is. There is no "perfect" relationship. Next, I like how it was cute and ...

Hello. I really like your poem. The rhythm is very nice and the voice is great. The emotion of "being out of place" is also great. I can feel the ...

Hello, I agree with Kyllorac about going more in-depth. Dyslexics are usually called "lazy" "dumb" or "careless". That could be added to your poem. Also, talk about the talent of ...

Hello Author-of-15 :D, I read this chapter before I read the first one and I saw improvement. You had some good parts in the first one that I liked--describing the ...