Crysi

Very nice, Snoink. A bit sensual - no surprise coming from you. The only thing I had a problem with was the mention of tone holes. It took me out ...

Hahaha. You guys are so funny.

...*blinks* What she said. And I'm STILL not in here? Sheesh! I think I should randomly sprout out of one of those oddly-capitalized words. Yeah.

No, 'Reida. You really don't. (Horrid book we had to read for English... It's basically a textbook on the history of philosophy. With horrible writing and pathetic attempts at plot. ...

"What a weird thing to say!" Areida exclaimed. I just got a total flashback to Sophie's World. *shudders* That was not a happy feeling.

Or, you could write it like "g(u)ilt" and combine them. I like all the consonance used here. It gives it kind of a sway, as you mentioned. To me, at ...

Hahahaha... dude. The last point tied it all up perfectly. Amazing.

*taps foot impatiently* GRIIIIIIIIIIFF, you PROMISED us! We were only briefly mentioned, and we didn't even get to sing any Beatles music! Hmph.

Why ask me? I'm not even in the story. :P But yeah. I'm slightly terrified and extremely disturbed.

Well, I got that. :P

...Wow. Not many stories can affect me the way yours just did... Only the good ones. That was breathtaking (no pun intended). There were a few confusing spots (and when ...

*grins* Griffy m'dear, you've mastered my character. Bravo. Fantastic.

:) Thanks! Doe, interesting idea you perceived in the beginning. Helps me shape the next part of the story. I'll try to add in Crystalia's age. It's taken me quite ...

I'm a Bush fan. I loved this. I really liked how you did the listing of Hitler and Stalin - of course, at that point I could guess who they ...

Blob, it'd be nice if you actually broke your paragraphs into coherent sentences... :roll: lol. Okay Shadow, finished critiquing the piece. If someone has already said something I have, oh ...