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Hey there! I study film, so I hope my feedback can help you out a bit! The first thing I would like to address is your logline: "Two young men ...

Moss *that* filled *the* cracks ran down the walls like [pus from] infected wounds that never fully healed. I think you mean mold, hon. If it were moss, I don't ...

Heyooo, this is Craz with a review! The first paragraph is very jumbled, and I'm not entirely sure what's going on. There's some sort of bell that's ringing to call ...

Heyo, this is Craz with a review: Tidbits: "Her bare feet echoed off of the stairs as she pattered down." Suggestion: Reword to "Her bare feet pattered down the stairs, ...

This is Craz with a review! "Sam...was my best friend." There should be a space after each ellipsis (the "..."). Just a small error, but I see you do it ...

Craz here with a review~ I think the beginning is too sudden. You need to build it up more, and make it less abrupt from them running (jogging? going somewhere? ...

EY YO DIS CRAZ WITH A REVIEW Fearing which, Clyde scrambled down the stairs with little grace or regard for reverence. He checked the bathroom, and left tables upturned in ...

Heyoo, this is Craz with a review! There are a few small grammatical errors here and there, but nothing major. Here are the ones that I caught: "The rain danced ...

Hi there, Craz with a review~. For this I'll be commenting as I go, so please bear with me ;). Great introduction. There is nice flow between sentence to sentence, ...

She sat there, shivering, who knew what would happen to her? This sentence is a bit confusing to me. I think it should be reworded to She sat there, shivering. ...

Craz with a review for team Valor~ It was early morning and Nathan could feel the air quickly getting warmer , (;) in a few hours he would be sweating ...

Here's Craz with a review~ Grammar Stuffs: "The deceitful sun glared through my glasses on that languid summer day, the cool breeze roaring in through the open windows, a wide ...

This is Craz with a review! As requested, I won't do grammar and I'll focus on the overalls. (I'd change up the words "around" and "ground". Maybe this is technically ...

Craz with a review~ Grammatical stuffs: Realization that all our worries were becoming reality before our eyes was making my stomach ache. I stole a glance at my parents, seeing ...

Heya, this is me with a review~ I'm going to skip specific grammatical errors on this one. Instead, I'm going to gloss over the biggies throughout this review: First Impression ...