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There IS a reason for why she reacts to being conscripted, yes... though I wanted to save that reveal for a later point in the story. She's no problem with ...

Thanks for your insight. And, yes, this is a first draft so I'll be making changes when it closes. :) A few things I'd like to ask about, regarding some ...

I'm glad the story itself is to your liking. And I see your point, regarding the technical bits. We're almost nearing what I'd consider to be the end of the ...

The star scene harkens back to her conscription, yeah. She was taken to that very sea of stars and surrounded by many colored lights, representing the Altr. Orlen, her patron, ...

Remember how fast Vanessa did when fighting Nokor? Alexandra is known as being even stronger so, yes, the thing dodging her is worrisome. :o And it was mentioned back on ...

Well, I described how the keep itself looks way back in the start of this (chapter 2, when Hilda first arrived). Wouldn't going over it again to refresh the image ...

Thanks for your comment, Skins. :D Alexandra's mark will absolutely be important to the plot so I figured I should add a wee bit of info to it as things ...

The scene with the dinner was meant to be mostly filler, actually, but it was also made to provide an opening for bits of information about Eliza herself. Thus far, ...

I've no problem with you not finding any major issues in a chapter - it's a nice confidence boost! :P As for the secrets surrounding Paula's group, there's a reason ...

Hilda'll be going back to Litnir soon enough - wait just a wee bit more! :D As for the crater, consider this: the crater has been there for about a ...

I'm glad you liked it! I've a bit of a problem in that I don't like to make blank-slate characters if I can avoid it. I always figured, when presented ...

I wanted to take a closer look at Owen but felt that it couldn't happen before they settled their matters. I can tell you that the chapter after the next ...

A wee bit above 80k words! :shock: But, yes, I had this planned out to be a very long story, so the pacing will be rather slow. I know a ...

I think, when I first started, I decided that I wouldn't pay too much attention to conservation of matter simply because we're dealing with both magic and an trans-dimensional metal ...

Ah, fair enough. I reckon I can make some tweaks there.