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It's the first draft, yeah, though I've had the story brewing in my head for years now. And we're more like 110k words! And I'm aware that the plot is ...

Well, a whole lot of the things Eliza and Ryouma were talking about are stuff we haven't learned about yet. The two of them do, though, which is why they ...

Well, going by the three you pointed out, I'd say this one is a mix of 1 and 2. The conflict itself is simply providing the setting, where the focus ...

I've kept the prose issues and infodumping in mind but I'll be going over it after the rest of this first book closes off. Simpler to do it that way, ...

Paula's more tight-lipped than she seems, let's just say that. But I've accounted for that when imagining her past, yes. There's more to her, and Hilda's, story than they're telling ...

In truth, were Hilda to fight a Necromancer right now, she'd be rolled over and tossed aside... I do get what you mean about the overarching plot not being there ...

Well, there isn't really meant to be tension at this point of the story. It IS still training, as Hilda's only been at it for a little while (though this ...

Hmhmm... I see your point. In truth, this is another thing I'd set to prune later. The video gamey side of things goes to limit the scope of what rookies, ...

Oh, and I'll see if I can't add a hint of Hilda's past at the first chapter - at least get that ball running sooner.

You mean tell the whole story through Ryouma's POV? I don't think that'd quite work because, normally, a bunch of his day is spent doing his work as one of ...

Sure, I agree with you on that. But we, as humans, are prone to going through emotional roller-coasters when taken into unfamiliar territory, no? Were someone to come home and ...

The petulance will not last long, no. She's just in a really bad mood right now and lashing out at her surroundings - comparatively, chapter 1 was her in her ...

Hmm, alright. Once I close this first book, I'll take some time to revisit this and see what I can drop later on as morsels of history. I'll take a ...

The next couple of chapters should provide some more insight into Hilda as a character now that her life's been turned upside-down. She HAS just been essentially grabbed by the ...

Hmm, I see what you mean. But, then, doesn't it diminish the impact of having a "life-changing moment" when you have no perspective in how the character's life was before? ...