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Hmm, I see what you mean. Like, maybe have one of the generals tap on the chairs and segue into a small description of them. Alright, I'll remember that during ...

Frig... that change in POV slipped by me. I do it sometimes but not as abruptly as this (not intentionally, at least). I'll make some changes. As for the concise ...

Fair enough - I'll do some edits on the bits you pointed out and run over the whole thing when editing the entire first book. I confess I was a ...

We've heard of Necros before - as far back as the first chapter, even - but I never quite had room to insert them into the story just yet. If ...

Oh, there's more to Hilda's past from what's readily apparent over the past chapters. Some parts on her I wasn't too subtle to have it serve as a red herring ...

No, Necromancers are pretty much all scum. Problem is, I figured making them all cold, calculating monsters wouldn't really seem believable. All things considered, they ARE still people - mages ...

I have actually been dropping small hints for a while now... but maybe they're too small! :o There are other smaller subplots around, mind, but they're still being set up ...

Josette's accent is intentionally over-the-top and caricature-esque here, that's just how she toys with people who don't know her. She'll be speaking normally soon, don't worry. And I wasn't too ...

Well, the thing IS a zombie so it stands to reason it'd just keep coming back until you wreck it good. :O Nokor's standing as a scarecrow because he's out ...

She never left - the only one who did was Paula, when Vanessa asked her to take the hostages away. I guess I'll need to rewrite to make it clearer ...

I figured I'd left enough room for doubt regarding whether Vanessa would actually leave them to die or not. Was that not clear, in your opinion? This is pretty much ...

Do you take hubris to be a human-exclusive trait? :P Regardless, there's more to Nokor's actions than just that. I have been writing as omniscient but have always tried to ...

Sure the war is a problem but I've made it a point since the start that it's been, for eight centuries, more of a Northern Reaches problem 90% of the ...

I reckon I didn't write the "sourness" bit as well as I could - the narrator's not talking about an abstract emotion but, rather, the sour expression on her face. ...

Yeah, I see your point with simplifying stuff - I'll probably be cutting a lot once editing begins. As for the halberd, I confess I did ask myself if it ...