Corncob

First off, 16+ for language, reread your last word. :) And also, a warm welcome to YWS! Lastly, the title: what goes in her mind. Shouldn't it be, what goes ...

Well, I really liked this. I think the title was what really pulled me in, and the poem lived up to the title. However, I do understand it is rather ...

I have nothing to nitpick. I swear to God, I am in awe of this piece. It's the perfect mix of metaphors, attention-capturing, descriptive words, imagery, and literacy. I nearly ...

Hehe, this made me laugh. It made me think of this poem I once read in class about comparing a lab rat to poetry (i.e. how people analyze them way ...

Am I the only one who thought this would be about racism? #MLKJ I have a dream speech anyone? Sorry, besides that, I thought this was good. Nitpicks: In small ...

I really liked this, especially the style it was written. The only question I have is: At the end (or I might be reading this wrong) it says: a toilet, ...

Well, this seemed more like a religious chanting than a poem, but I shall do my best to review it anyway. Rhyming: Inconsistent, and often didn't work. First off, you ...

Wow. Your descriptions are great. Amazing. Powerful. So powerful. This border lines as a rant, but the title does it justice. I suggest you divide this piece of work up ...

Welcome to YWS! I can't review this in this format. I'm sorry, it NEEDS to be spaced out and divided into different paragrpahs. It hurts my brain and I simply ...

Hi, TakeThatYouFiend. So.... Judging from reading the other reviews, it sounds like A LOT of people are "misunderstanding" you. Usually, when so many people "misunderstand" you, you need to change ...

Like TheProviant, I am unable to help you with grammar. You are a great writer, and if you look back, I'm sure you'll notice that somethings aren't capitalized, and some ...

Suggested revisions: Try to make the flow a little more consistent. I had to force the words into my mind repeatedly to make them follow a comfortable rhythm, and it ...

Well, this poem was quite short, and short poems are hard to review. I shall try anyway. First off, I think this works well as a short poem. However, you ...

First off, I just want to say your creative idea of writing a poem in the form of a telegram and using each STOP as part of the poem is ...

Well, this isn't so much of a review as a massive question. What was this poem about? I have a very, very, very, very, EMPHASIS ON VERY vague idea on ...