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  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Vampirisi; Chapter Four

    Hey I think your chapter is pretty good. You've got some outstanding dialogue however it goes on just a little bit too long and it would be great if you ...

    Jul 14, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Fantasy Re: The Pirate Queen: Chapter 15, Part 1

    Hey there, this is a really great chapter! You really know how to capture the readers attention and keep them interested. I am a little confused as to why you ...

    Jul 14, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Dramatic Re: Straight {Chapter 1}

    Hey this sounds like a great first chapter. However you gave me a bit too information about the wrong things and not enough about the right things. If you really ...

    Jul 14, 2014
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Literature Re: Needlework

    "Criticism is like needlework, sewn deep into my skin. I bleed its ink in my every step" As someone who has faced a lot of criticism, this poem is very ...

    Feb 3, 2014
  • Poetry » Realistic, Lyrical Re: All You See is Lines.

    You have touched on this delicate subject beautifully. My favourite part has to be this bit "And remember the first, when you begun feel pain again". This shows that you ...

    Feb 3, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Other Re: Come Hear Me- Chapter One

    Hey there! This is a good piece of writing, that can be made great with a few little changes. First of it pulled me in straight away, but perhaps a ...

    Feb 3, 2014
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Narrative Re: Flawed

    [quote] "Face me with my flaws and tell me you see me for who I really am." [Quote] I love these opening lines. Overall this poem is really conveying a ...

    Aug 25, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Just Free.

    This poem is very relatable. To the point where I have tears in my eyes, as I know exactly what you're talking about. The only thing I'm unsure about with ...

    Aug 21, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Chapter 1

    First off, please use paragraphs! You have a great plot but I got lost and slightly put off by the fact all the writing was just in one lump. It ...

    Aug 21, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Prologue

    Wow, okay, I definitely can't wait to hear more on this. You have keep the prorogue nice and short but sweet. Without a doubt you have succeed in leaving the ...

    Aug 21, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Dramatic Re: The Capital

    I really like the idea you have going here. There are a few grammar and spelling errors but it still flows quite nicely. The tension you have left the reader ...

    Aug 21, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Falling Skies

    While you clearly have a great idea, there are a few changes that need to be made to make this into a great read. Your sentences are a little chunky, ...

    Aug 21, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Politics Re: Chapter 7 of the Unchosen Ones

    First off I think you have a great plot here and I definitely want to keep reading. However you could go into a little bit more detail about this new ...

    Aug 21, 2013


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— Paul Simon