Chosenofair

My complaint is that there's no buildup. They tell nothing of what's been happening to the kingdom or why they need to find the Book of the Dead, and I ...

Is this about the Crusades? If it is, you do an interesting job of describing what the battles were like. I like how you don't necessarily describe the intensity of ...

Your haikus remind me a bit of T. A. Barron. In his Great Tree of avalon series, he has a morning prayer that says something about breaking dawn finding you(I ...

Ok, I know it's supposed to be silly, but adding the "whoa" made it seem just a touch too silly. I''m sorry to say it, but it reeks a touch ...

Ok, speaking as one who has written poetry for a while, I'd say this is a good start. I think you say "I'm sorry" a bit much. it would be ...

The poem wasn't bad. It had a lot of imagery, and that was nice, but you should vary your word choice a bit more. The word "eye(s)" appeared three times ...