Chloe(:

Hey Summer! Coming into my own had always proved to be a problem with me. Coming into your own? Ever since I’d been a little girl I didn’t know what ...

Hey Shina! On to the review... Will the prize I’ve had my eyes on for so long be enough to repay what all I’ve done to get there? After repay, ...

I know people are saying that everyone who complains about Twilight are just jealous of Stephanie Meyer and her riches and fame and everything and that we just envy her. ...

Hello, I'll be reviewing you today. First of all: His breath came quickly as he ran and he admitted to himself that he might need to give up his pipe ...

Chapter I Meetings A voice questioned pulling me out of my ‘sleep’. At first I didn't get this part. Maybe change it? Okay “So who are you, exactly?” What's the ...

Hey Evi! I am here to review your poem. Here are some suggestions. to them, the winter’s cool touch is almost welcome; the snowflakes are just as unique as they’ve ...

I'm Vivi and I'll be your reviewer today. I thought that the beginning was pretty good, it got you caught in the story. I think that the transitions from part ...

That was great :D . But I have a suggestion; Gorgeous But there is something I feel, that gives me a sense of… Evil Thou’s word are harsh and frightening ...

I think you should space the lines up. It's really hard to read without the spaces. Do it like this: MATT: (Snaps) Not you! No, mother, it was the taxi ...

Love it :lol: Especially here: Sock-ee: Huh? The washing machine... It's not moving! I'm safe! A few chirps echo throughout the machine. Sock-ee: Oh, no. And here's a mistake I ...

Umm, well is this a script or a short story? It's hard to tell. The actions usually aren't in parenthesis' in books, or any stories I have read. Also, at ...

[s]My heart was beating fast, as I ran down the stairs from my mother.[/s] Maybe: My heartbeat kept getting faster, and faster, as I ran downstairs, as far away as ...

Prologue It didn’t matter where I turned. It didn’t matter where I was. It defiantly didn’t matter if he was alive or not. Part of him was gone. He wouldn’t ...

It'll Be Okay She holds her child close, clutched in the grip of terror. I agree, it should be 'a' They listen to him downstairs, waiting for him to leave ...

This is a pretty short preface, but any suggestions or critiques on how I could make it better are extremely appreciated :D. Also, I could always use some help in ...