Chirantha

I can see that you had used great words to express the feeling. Good work. I was born into this dark world, a blooming flower in the sun. But the ...

I like it. It shows out it's meaning by such a few sentences. Good work. It's time for me to crash, boom, fall. Into your open arms, that don't seem ...

I not a person who knows much about poetry, but your poem wasn't the type I expected from you, no offence but I'm disappointed. :( Well, the repetition made it ...

Let me see. Good poem. Katrina(,) you have (had) done your duty, satan (Satan) has erected your call. Now(,) in the fiery depths of hell(,) the crowd is expanding. Gustav ...

Yup, it was short and straight to the point, so I like it. It was great. Here we met, The sun had already set. It should be "The sun 'was' ...

I like it. It was great. It really had a deep meaning. About an attraction and the about the person's soul, life or existence. And it shows the persons love. ...

This story is becoming more and more interesting. Good work. “How happy you are, wretched mortal…” Good start. Hands were holding him down to the ground as he was struggling ...

Oooh, the second chapter. **rubs hands togethor** Right, let me see, He woke up but didn’t open his eyes not daring to leave that pleasant numbness that was left in ...

Another story of vampires. Okay, let me rip this apart. Just kidding. :wink: I looked up into the sky. It was dark and cold, too cold. It was always dark ...

That was a great poem. It had a deep meaning. Which I couldn't ponder on. You had used so many metaphors and really great phrases. Into a flower of the ...

I really liked your story. I mean it was not like regular vampire stories. So I liked it. But there was one question. Was your character a boy or a ...

Well, I can say that the part about the king and the sword ans the part about the boy and the girl (whoever they are) doesn't match. Or it something ...

Somehow, this reminds me of "The lord of the rings" Well done, this certainly is great. But I want to point out that when writing a dialogue, you should put ...

Your poem was great and interesting. But, as smorgishborg says, you had repeated some metaphors and it didn't help your poem. A rising light glints at the horizon. The horizon ...

Well, I can say that you had tryed to make this more meaningful and interesting, and you had. But only with the words, but not with the lines or the ...