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Happy Review Day! The point of view here is very unique, but you already know that. The dog's constant observations and questions are refreshing and quite humorous. At the beginning, ...

Happy Review Day! Let's begin. Firstly, you seem to have copied your story over and over again. I have no idea why. Secondly, the most prominent problem with this story ...

Happy Review Day! This chapter is, in a word, excellent. Really, your descriptions of Talon's thoughts perfectly characterize him. They convey a calculating, slightly arrogant teen hacker quite well.

Happy review day! I still enjoy your style here. It feels like I'm being told a fairytale. But no, I'm being told a Fairy Tail. :) Your dialogue and descriptions ...

Hello. As I read this story, I found myself enjoying "what" happened, but was at a loss a few times as to "how." Things like this: "He suddenly seemed like ...

Hello again. What enjoyable characters you have here! The way they interact is (dare I say it) very cute, and this seems to be shaping up to be an enjoyable ...

Another review. You've carried over your skills of details between dialogue, as well as your gift for tone. But the god's dialogue is, as you know, a bit off. I'll ...

Ooh, Percy Jackson. Well, let's start with pros. Description of characters and dialogue seem to be your strengths here. The tiny observational details fill in a lot between dialogue. Just ...

Shall we? Let's begin with your plot. It's quite intriguing for its bluntness. I wonder what's happening between Ivy and her mother, so you've done well with your prologue. There ...

Shall we? Really great intro. The tone it sets throughout is superb. But the word "firefighters" threw me off for some reason. Personally, I would've put it as "fire-fighters" to ...

Here we go again. Well, let's kick things off with positives. The quick-paced narration works for the environment here, jamming it into the reader's head to give them as big ...

Quick review. I'll tell you already that I haven't read your other chapters. I don't think you should describe Hades's cuts as "nicks." If they're deeper, use words like wounds ...

Interesting. I definitely enjoy your writing style. You do just enough to invoke the reader's imagination and create a vivid image. You could have extended this chapter with more setting. ...

Oh, the horror. But I don't think that there's enough of it here. Usually, description helps with making things more gruesome. Fountains of blood, corpses torn open, entrails leaking from ...

Fairy Tail! Okay, for starters, I enjoy your style of writing here. It feels like the story is being narrated, but in the magical way that legends are told. I ...