Charm

The dialogue and paragraph structure is grammatically correct. Anyway, thank you for your review.

Again, you're wrong when in comes to breaking the paragraphs with dialogue. Maybe put in a little research yourself. Also Atana has no emotion so that's why I use "spoke" ...

The next thing I would like to mention is the dialogue. When you're using it, you break the paragraph. Or with a different thought. I noticed you didn't do this ...

:3

drinking tea while reading this xD i loved this as a fellow poet and as a fellow tea-fueled human

that the monsters under your bed have left for some other kid's bunk that hit me really hard...xD I'm a super nostalgic person so yeah...ouch xD

Rose, this is really good! Definitely your best so far and I know you can do even better in the future *thumbs up*!

Thanks! This was an excerpt so it doesn't hold an entire story, it's just one scene.

this song reminds me of "We Don't Talk Anymore" by Charlie Puth featuring Selena Gomez

Thanks for the review! Grammar isn't necessary in poetry.

Thanks Rose c:

aw Audy thank you

lol

*bangs head against a table* why *bang* did *bang* I *bang* ever *bang* write *bang* this AAAHHHH IT'S SO BAD