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Re: The Magical Diary of L.L.P--part 3
Again, you seem to sweep me off my feet and into this magical world where i am going through the steps with Lily and feeling everything she is feeling. there ...
Dec 30, 2011 -
Re: The Magical Diary of L.L.P
OMG it is absolutely brilliant!it's so good and i love how you have capture the imagination of a young child. it's soo good! i love totally brilliant i have no ...
Sep 13, 2011 -
Re: Prologue
I've noticed a few things i would like to change if you don't mind. I thought it was quite good and has good description but just a few tiny changes. ...
Sep 12, 2011 -
Re: Pillows
oooo i thought this was a happy bit of lyrics until i reach the ending and it seemed to have a dark ending i loved the music that seemed to ...
Jan 7, 2011 -
Re: And that would be a lie...
I love how you leave the imagination to the reader, so they feel like there there watching this girl write in her diary, this is a good literary use, and ...
Jan 7, 2011 -
Re: Life In the Eyes Of a Godless Man
i like how it has a joyful tone and then turns very sad but i can't really see how love can come from this i can see lust hidden in ...
Jan 7, 2011 -
Re: The Earth
this has a sense of doom and gloom, it's a bit short but i doubt that should really matter as long as it good and it brings in comments and ...
Jan 7, 2011 -
Re: Light and dark.
right this seems a bit short but that can never hold back a good writer, i like the context but you just need to add more describing words to it ...
Jan 7, 2011 -
Re: Amy Lynn and Matt
heyya, right i like the story flow to your 'story' (that's going to sound weird now i said it twice oh well :) ) for when they are texting i ...
Jan 7, 2011 -
Re: A Powerful Vice
to me this poem didn't really shine out, and i found t quite confusing towards the end, but i loved the strong and powerful uses in the poem, this made ...
Jan 7, 2011 -
Re: What She Really Is
i'm loving the context to this poem and how this has feeling flooding through it and how it captures this girl in true light, i really enjoy reading it, it ...
Jan 6, 2011 -
Re: Finally
Those eyes, which were shy. It now tries, to say goodbye..!! i like how the lines flow and it makes it better to read and pulls the reader in! I ...
Jan 3, 2011 -
Re: Right Where I Want You
I like how the story grips you and makes you want to read on it's good, besides there's a few mistakes spellings and grammar if you just read over it ...
Dec 30, 2010 -
Re: Lie To Me~1
i really like how the story flows, i love how at the begging it's a quick story of the past a re-counter, it informs the reader what they have missed. ...
Dec 30, 2010 -
Re: Look At Me
Look at me. Look beyond the things that you can see. I may be normal and fine but I ache for more. I’m still inside my shell. I just hate ...
Dec 28, 2010