Chanson

If you're going to write a story that involves subjects that are so incredibly emotional for so many people, I feel you have to have a strong understanding of what ...

The subject matter you are attempting to deal with here is very interesting to me and something I'm very passionate about. Dealing with the fall out of abuse in the ...

I like the angle this poem is written from but I think the poem needs to be reworked. There are just too many words - too many words, too many ...

I really liked the repetition of "yes" in the last stanza. I thought it was very interesting, adding a kind of stream-of-consciousness feel to the poem (obviously the intention, as ...

for me, this just wasn't poetic enough. it didn't flow. it was a series of ideas put across using big words but it just didn't feel like poetry. the phrase ...

I thought this was so, so, so pretty. I really liked it. The only thing that annoyed me (and I don't know if it was on purpose or not) was ...

this poem was quite well written and it did keep reading through it (uncommon these days, as i have almost no attention span recentely). however, the poem didn't really make ...

i liked it. a lot. it was simple and i iliekd the rhyme. i dunno, i don't normally like poetry like this but this appealed to me. although, yeah, it ...

porcelain throne? hahahahahahahahaha. TOILET. hahahahahahahahahahaha. sorry it might not be constructive but that really just cheered me up. and the story was very nice, too. i can't say i'm that ...

for me there was just way too much description and not enough emotion. if you're just going to describe something (like clouds or the sky) then it's probably only going ...

the last two lines were unnecessary and disrupted the flow - "space" would have looked better if it was seperate from the rest of the poem, but really it didn't ...

the poem felt bare, there was no warmth in it. i felt it was a little over explained. restructuring a bit (as suggested by jack) would deifintely help. really though ...

okey dokey, i was just happy because i read this poem and i was like "damn him, i wish i'd thought of that line. wait, i know that line." and ...

for me this was too simple, too easily written. the thoughts seemed cliché, i felt like i'd read all this before. the last verse, for me, was too....i think i'll ...

i suppose i liked this so much 'cause i relate to the girl (not that that is a particularly good thing!). but, yeah, i really did like it. i love ...