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Re: The Artistry of Counseling
Thank you for the reviews guys, yes I've been struggling with the rhyme scene myself, but after a couple of tries I decided to give up on it and leave ...
Jul 22, 2011 -
Re: The Foreseeing Boy.
I'm sorry, it is a dedication indeed :) Thanks for the comments -^^ Cheerios, Chandni
Aug 8, 2007 -
Re: [deleted]
Different, that's all I have to say here. And I mean it in the most positive way ever :) Sorry, this wasn't useful at all. Cheerios, Chandni
May 30, 2007 -
Re: Photons to Freedom
Thanks :) And the poem you linked to is indeed highly entertaining. I'll contact Mau-able about your critiques, and we'll eventually try to work on it ;) Cheerios, Chandni
May 14, 2007 -
Re: The Tree of Life
Rhyming a bit here and there, lack of punctaution, flow, structure. Disordered capitalization, cliched images. I'm sorry that's all I can get out of this piece. It's not vague, quite ...
Apr 6, 2007 -
Re: A Day in The Life of a Fountain
I would like this to be posted in the "Other Poetry" section. Comments there are most likely to be appreciated. Cheerios, Chandni
Apr 6, 2007 -
Re: my friend is addicted
I'm very sorry but this does not belong in the Poetry section :( *Shouts out to Mods*
Mar 21, 2007 -
Re: Beyond the Sun of Day
Everything Claudette said except for one more minor mistake. First line, "cages" not "cadges" Cheerios,Chandni
Mar 20, 2007 -
Re: Aging fingers
Allright, let's get ahold of things here. As Firestarter said indeed, the way you left "quit" and "alone" apart suited a nice structure which you seemed to have lost in ...
Mar 19, 2007 -
Re: it's friday night and i feel like dancing
Please rate this "R" that's all I have to say for now, maybe I'll come back later :roll: Cheerios, Chandni
Feb 20, 2007 -
Re: Sight Fails
Yes. This belongs in the lyrics section *Shouts out to Mods :)* Cheerios, Chandni
Jan 14, 2007 -
Re: Real-Life Young Love
Okay yeah I'm feeling you Izzy, first off I am not demanding any change, let the poem be. This is just feedback and information you may need for your further ...
Jan 3, 2007 -
Re: Real-Life Young Love
looby-lou, what we're basically trying to say is that it looks like you've been using forced rhyming to bring your essence forward, which wasn't nescesarry. Poetry does not have to ...
Jan 2, 2007 -
Re: Velocity vs Chronology
Aha, thnx a bunch for that Cadmium, the thing is my handwritten version isn't capitalized like that lol. I was in a hurry posting this and since Word capitalizes every ...
Dec 20, 2006 -
Re: The Cryptogram's Script
Ikes, I'm very sorry for I thought I had made things clear enough for everybody, so it is that it is only clear for me, :oops: I would like to ...
Dec 10, 2006