Chandni

Hi and Welcome to YWS:) I was toggling through the Dramatic Poetry section and this wasn't what I was looking for, really. This is not recalled poetry at all anything ...

I like your concept and your rhyming scheme although at some point it did not seem to rhyme f.e. Help those who are below us Who's future is unsure , ...

A bit demanding now isn't it? I'm not sure if this realy poetry, it sounds more like a guide :? ifso I wouldn't post it in Dramatic Poetry. I'd recommend ...

I enjoyed this, I really did :) There's not much I can say here, but at this one part you blew my mind-in a good way- Clutching my thin frame ...

Okay lets start off smoothly, ahum Please capitalize all the "I's" :) Okay so you're longing for freedom, pretty intresting I guess but the way you brought it forward was ...

Well Okay, see uhmm the basic thing about poetry is making the reader understand it without explaining that the poem "obviously" meant to be that way or that the last ...

Hmm, this sounds very intresting, I guess I read a similiar book to this one before. About writing a biography and such, I hardly remember it. But hey I'm looking ...

Hi, Well first of all I'm very sorry about your friend and all, but might I remind you that there's no need for explaining anything the point is, that it ...

At first I found the flow well suiting and enjoyable, but you've seen to repeat alot of words which makes it rather boring/anoying in the end. I'm very found of ...

The essence here is great :) I'm not a fan of your structure but you managed to fit it all in. I found it a little short though, perhaps more ...

Dear Lexy, Yes, what Firestarter said. I'd suggest you to appreciate these comments especially the time there's been given to even comment, you see this site is to help you ...

Well I see here nice templates but then again this is so overruled and not unique as we've seen this kind of poetry tons of times. The structure is nice, ...

Well the whole plot seems to be good, but to my concern your word-choice at some places seem a bit akward :? making it look like your telling some sort ...

Well this is quite well but a bit boring because of the last poem I read from you (Transition To Decaf) had almost the same essence. Maybe a little more ...

Xanthamgum you spoke the words for me :) Well done Bob ! The title is just perfect, drags attention like KABOOM ;)