Chandni

Well it was nicely tried, I'll back up "sabradan" here. It is indeed a typical teen angst poem, but other than that you had some usable descriptions which to my ...

You have some nice descriptions here indeed, as pointed out before the first line is utterly intresting and adds a boost. The last line of the first stanza bothered me ...

First of all it's nothing I haven't read before and failed at impressing me or showing me something new. About the rhyming scene, it's basically spread all over. You're first ...

I found this very abstracted, which is exactly what I like. I've been able to think over this piece and found myself highly enjoyed. Now that I've found myself being ...

Nice and adequate. You have some nice descriptions allthough I'd rather see this poem in a second person form rather than in a first person form. "You're good people, girl." ...

Allright, allright :) Simplistic, nice poem. I haven't got much to say here, just one thing. The first three stanzas accentuate the "connection" you want the readers to know about, ...

It was a nice read, no doubt about that. One thing, the title was rather "unattractive" long and dull. Too much explanation for a title. Off to the poem itself, ...

comments are unappreciated. I'm not sure what you mean by that? :? But okay off to the poem itself. Hatred and Pain both of kin alike, Shadows that cast Fear ...

Allright :) let's get ahold of things here ;) As Firestarter said indeed, the way you left "quit" and "alone" apart suited a nice structure which you seemed to have ...

:shock: The structure here is way off. Ahum. It doesn't look like a poem at all, just some scrambled sentences. This needs alot of editing either to post it as ...

Nice, thight, awesome ;) Totally backgroungbob, as much as we expect from you :) Cheerios, Chandni

Hmph, nothing we haven't seen before same old same old. The topic to start with speaks for itself- simple . Take a good look around the forums, and try experimenting ...

Okay, first off the rhyming - a very tacky rhyming scene - I liked the way you started off making the sound and ground rhyme. Different we don't see it ...

Okay but not terrific. Your use of the capitalization (whether it was intended or not) didn't quite work for me Amid the flowers of Imagination I met her smile And ...

Not much to say here, as it's all been said before ;) but one thing: flaxen and paris, littered with Romanian letters Romanian? isn't it supposed to be Roman ? ...