CastlesInTheSky

Here I am again, trying desperately to repay you. :wink: Her manner had been overwhelmingly joyous ever since the mention of the ball that the Greenly's would attend come sundown. ...

Hi Merry! I'm really sorry but I can't do a detailed critique tonight, because it's really late and my fingers are numb. So this may epic fail as a review. ...

Here again! :) The fire licked at the wood in the fireplace, colliding with the humming of the birds that danced in the afternoon air. Lovely description to start with. ...

Hey there, angelsymphony! Sarah here as requested! :D I'm not going to do a line-by-line, nitpicking critique, because your spelling and grammar seems to be looking good. And anyway, the ...

Here again! :D I've just realised I've been confusing Maxine and Emily in the previous chapters, so forgive me for that. The blue of the morning spilled into the dawn, ...

Here again! :D As she turned the silver knob, Emily grunted impatiently behind her. Seeing that Emily is a superficial little madam, I think 'grunt' has the wrong connotations. Maybe ...

Here at last to review, as requested, Angel! :D Sorry for digging an old thread up... Elizabeth sauntered across the lush green fields and twirled in the sun's warm breath. ...

Hi Sofi! Looks like this has already been torn apart and nit-picked, so my comments mayn't be as helpful as I'd hoped. I'll focus on overall comments, because of the ...

Hey there Kirsten! Nitpicks first, overall afterwards. I'm going to do this now until Chapter 3, and finish it later. :arrow: Do you like the characters? Are they well developed... ...

I really, really owe you a review. :P So here goes. The entire residence looked like an English castle reduced in size twenty times. This would read a lot better ...

Ooh, I do really like this, a lot. ^_^ Sorry for the time it took to critique, I would have done this review way earlier seeing as I definitely owe ...

It's Sarah! :D Here as requested, dahling. Forgive me if I ramble or am too harsh, I'm only harsh to people whose work is good. AKA - you. :wink: Before ...

Here as requested, Twooster. :D I've done this lengthy critique about three times and my computer's deleted it every single time. So forgive me if I sound crabby. ‘Druuuuuuuth. We ...

Here as requested, Lucy Goosey. :wink: Don't be put off if I'm harsh, I'm only here to help. Silence: slowly I looked up at the neglected old house, a nice ...

Here as requested, Teddy! :D Blue, Purple and Red I agree with Kitty about this. There's nothing interesting or original about it, nothing dragging the reader in. Find a spark. ...