CassandraInvisible

All in all, a well constructed poem for something written so quickly. No light, leading which way. No voice, calling your name. No feeling, pulling you this way. No heart, ...

Honestly, I found this very hard to read. What put me off were the myriad of spelling and grammatical errors. You really should proof read this, or get a friend ...

I would say this is more a little quote than a poem. It doesn't really have any true elements of poetry, though it is clever. When I saw the title, ...

The AC is on way way way too high- The room's frigid 'The room's frigid' should probably be put on another line. It ruins the flow of the stanza. And ...

Wow. This is a very vivid, descriptive poem. I felt like I could see everything happening. like graphite voices from wooden slats and steel rails, oxidized with loose feet and ...

Reoccuring should be recurring This is a nice little poem, but I wasn't too sure where it's going either. I think you should expand it, write a couple more stanzas ...

Don't believe the weathers perfect the day you die I noticed this line, and recognized it from an Armor For Sleep song. I could be wrong, but I think you ...

All in all, this is a good piece of writing. You need to be more careful with spelling and grammatical errors however. One thing I don't understand is Ben's very ...

I'm no Christian, but this poem struck me as touching and sincere. I like this verse in particular: Why'd she have to leave today and why's it got to hurt? ...

I really liked this. The imagery is fantastic, I could see in my mind's eye what was going on and feel what the girl was feeling. The only line I ...

I really enjoyed reading this. My favourite part was: [i] Look to standardized intelligence and try to reach it, but still there is a barrier and I can’t seem to ...

The story has a good basis, but I got a little lost. The way it's written is rather confusing. The dialouge is all heaped together, sometimes two different people speaking ...

This has the potential to be a good story, you could elaborate on it further, make it longer and give it some more depth. I found it kind of hurried ...

Hmm. I feel like the poem is a bit out of sync, to give it more flow you should have stanzas of equal or alternating length, so the reader can ...

Sugar sweet and softly too; But here’s the thing – I don’t love you. Sickly, gaudy, paradise, You’re so toxic, ‘cause you’re so nice. I take it that's the chorus? ...