CardinalSouth

For some reason when I read this, I thought of girls wearing makeup. Girls are under the pressure to be attractive, and although no one says it aloud, it is ...

I don't think anyone should laugh! Sure, it may be short, but it has serious potential! Really, you should make it longer because I would love to read more ;) ...

Hello! I like your story, and I'm having a difficult time at the moment finding anything needing corrections. Well done! :) Your opening is great. Not only does it "set ...

This is beautiful! The only improvement I could find is to capitalize the first letters of the line, but that is standard grammar. Somehow the lower-case letters help to emphasize ...

This is really good, but could be improved. There were several sentences that could be revised to be more grammatically correct: Instead of... When she was done and her teeth ...