It hurts you know?
Knowing you've done all you could...
but it still isn't good enough.....
My words fell on death ears.
No one cared...
No one cares.....
Not for me...
A no name..
I tried.
I really did...
Couldn't you see?
Couldn't you hear?
I'll never be good enough.
No!
It isn't right!
I tried so hard!
I fought for it all!!!
I guess I was never good enough.
I'll always just be a no name.
A no name to you...
To them......
To me.....
Now it's all red....
but I'm sure you won't realize..
cause I'm a no name....
and this won't be a note to tell you,
"don't feel bad, it wasn't your fault"
because it was...
and I'm not sorry for making you feel guilty..
I hope you do...
I hope you realize that it hurt me...
~no name
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Hey Howl!
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I love this poem! Most poems with this theme are all about how it's totally okay that you ripped me in two, or shattered my hopes and dreams, it doesn't matter that you totally ignored me, no matter what I did. It's really okay that you hurt me, and now we're all friends!! NO. JUST NO. I mean they are really nice poems, but this one expresses how you really feel, not how you know people want you to feel.(I have no idea if that makes sense or not...
I really like the end...
"and I'm not sorry for making you feel guilty..
I hope you do...
I hope you realize that it hurt me...
~no name"
This is how you really feel, and what you really want to say. Great job!
I only have one little nitpick though. I do think that you may have overused the ellipses (I had to Google that one....
Keep writing!!
-SnazzyPencil
*claps*
That's not sarcasm, I'm clapping because this is REALLY good! Just a couple of suggestions/errors:
Line 2-3.) either put a comma after "could" on line 2 or remove "but" from line 3 and start with "It still..."
Line 4.) The term is "fell on deaf ears" not "death ears"
Line 23-24.) either put a comma after "red" or remove but.
Line 24-25.) Either put a comma after "realize" on line 24 or remove "cause" in line 25
Line 26.) Remove "and", capitalize "this"
Line 26.) This "isn't" a note rather than this "won't be" (because they are reading the note and the note has been made.)
Line 27.) Capitalize "don't"
Line 28.) Remove "because" capitalize "it"
Line 29.) remove "and"
Great letter, keep up the great work.
This is beautiful! The only improvement I could find is to capitalize the first letters of the line, but that is standard grammar. Somehow the lower-case letters help to emphasize the narrator's worthlessness. This is an easy read full of depth and even tells a story. It is also easily relatable and many could testify that they've felt like this at one point or another; I know I have! Thank you for putting these distressful feelings into words.