Calligraphy

Hi Dhiren, like AngelKnight I agree that this sounds a lot like a summary. If you are planning on making this into a fantasy novel though it sounds very interesting ...

Hi Boo! Okay I just have to first point out I love your username. :D From my glance over I saw that Greena has given you some good advice on ...

Ehh, haven't all girls been in this same situation? It is very depressing. This is a really short piece so my review probably won't be too long. First, like Becca ...

This is very good ScarlettFire! So good I'm afraid I don't really have any places where you can improve. I think your repetitiveness really worked. I really felt the emotion. ...

Hi 13, okay so first I want to say I really agree with Vox. Beef things up add more detail. I really think this story line seems promising so far; ...

Hi MJ, though I don't really like the song Won't Go Home Without You by Maroon 5 I do happen to like your take on it. There wasn't really any ...

Hi WaitingForLife. So, all I can say is that I am really glad you have an 18+ rating on this, because it is on a rather foul subject matter. In ...

This is very good. It pulled sadness from me because a lot of the time I think we see each other not as people, but as how we want to ...

Hi Jennyr this novel looks pretty interesting, but piece is really long - over 7,000 words! That is probably why you haven't gotten any reviews. People usually don't have enough ...

Red: I fixed your grammar or punctuation. Blue: You can/should take these parts out. Today I 'll be heading to Abigail's house , and I gotta say I am pretty ...

Hi Carlito so I really liked this, but there are places you can improve. In grammar and in content. My biggest problem with this is that, to me at least, ...

Nitpicks. 1. Whoa, over-load of information in this first chapter. Even if you did it cleverly through the younger dragons asking questions I'm still never going to be able to ...

Nitpicks: 1. Every writer has that word they just have to use over and over again. Mine is 'suddenly', I manage to use it in almost every paragraph when I'm ...

Nitpicks: 1. "Room 310? I'm going there, actually," she said. Liam was relieved. "Oh, cool. Thanks, this is my first day here, so I'm a little lost with all the ...

Hi SuicideCrusader! This piece was posted a while ago and I see it still doesn't have any reviews! Right now most YWSers are busy with school and other things, but ...