Cailey

Oh okay! Maybe you could keep all three but add some kind of transition when you go back to just the two?

Thanks! Although everyone keeps giving me credit for this creativity, but a guy actually did take me paintballing, so I didn't just come up with it out of the blue. ...

Thank you for the review! I'm glad you liked it!

No worries! You're definitely entitled to not like my poem. I wasn't trying to make it sound dirty, and I'm not sure how it ended up sounding like that to ...

Thanks! Although I'm not sure, I think it may just be your mind. :)

Well, you know, it helps when the guy you like takes you paintballing. :)

Aw, thanks!

Thank you again for the review! Do you have anything of yours that you'd like reviewed? I'd love to help!

Thank you for your review! For whatever reason I always either get carried away with punctuation or just drop it when I write poetry. I will definitely continue to work ...

Thanks! For whatever reason I hadn't really thought about, you know, making the imagery match the paintball game (though there were cactuses and dry dirt in the paintball field) so ...

Thank you! It's nice having someone read old works sometimes, since it makes me go back and see different ways my writing has changed. This wasn't necessarily a lost romance ...

You're welcome!

Thank you so much for the review! Yes, the image of God as a big scary guy with huge hands just doesn't cut it for me, I think He is ...

Thanks for the review!

Thank you!