Cailey

Ooh I like that idea for the ending. I also especially like when the ending feels a little circular, so something like that would work. And wow! I don't know ...

Thanks tons for the review! And for the title suggestion!

Thank you! I definitely am working on a better title. I do like Hummingbird Hearts so maybe that will be the winner. :)

Totally meant to come and give you a review, but read this and all I can say is that it's really beautiful and sad, and good job and keep writing ...

roommate. Haha, what happened to the other half of my word? Oops. :P I'm losing letters.

Yeah! I like the changes and I think if you wanted to keep this going you definitely have room to add to it. I like the questions you added in.

Thanks for the review! Punctuation will be added, just hadn't gotten to it in this draft.

Yup, I was definitely thinking this was in need of punctuation and probably a lot of change in general, but figured I would post a very rough draft first to ...

hear* ;)

Sparky I love your writing. I want to leave a good proper review but it's 2am and sleep should probably be a thing... But I wanted to tell you that ...

Beautiful.

Actually you really don't need to have punctuation at the end of each line. In fact that style often makes a poem feel choppy, and it definitely would for this ...

Thank you! I am definitely missing my Mexico so much. :/ Writing poetry about it seems to help, haha. Anyway, thank you for this review!

Awesome, thank you for the great review. :) Also, I those last two lines you mentioned I wasn't entirely sure I liked, either, so knowing that they stood out to ...

Yeah, seriously, you can do whatever you want in poetry, especially if you have a reason. And no, it definitely is not necessary to have full stops at the end ...