Cailey

I liked this! In the first stanza scary and weary don't rhyme very well, so if you can think of a way to change that, it might sound better. But, ...

This was great! I loved it, and only found one nitpick: Pointless repetitions beat, endless drums beat to insane. I think it would work better if you didn't have the ...

They think it's sexy, I agree, I guess. It's our nice game where you tie me to you Try fixing this so that you don't have you used twice so ...

Before my review, I see you are new to YWS. Welcome! I hope you enjoy the site as much as I have. :D First comment: I think you should find ...

That was awesome, I felt like you had someone watched my life and then changed the characters and names and written a script about it. :) Seriously, my characters talk ...

Hey, this was great! I wasn't going to read it if it was long, but I couldn't help reading the first paragraph anyway. It drew me in and I couldn't ...

I really found this interesting. It definitely drew me in. :) You didn't give very much information, like Joshua Paul said you didn't reallly say anything about "it". However, I ...

Wow! I loved this, it was worded so perfectly and I could relate to it so much. The only comment I have is your line, I turned and ran, but ...

This was good, and I must say it also freaked me out. When I saw the title and read the first few sentences I thought the lady was going to ...

I liked this, it's super cute and romantice and made me want a guy to curl up with. ;) My head started pounding and my blood boiled. I didn't care ...

That was cool, and very emotional. You definitely caught the idea of this guy being addicted. :) I'm being held togetherby a fragile string of hope... I think these were ...

Wow! This was great. Sorry my review will be no good, but I just fell like I had to say something about this. :) It was good! It kind of ...

That was good. I liked it and it caught my attention. I know you wanted a review, but I don't have too much to say. It was well written and ...

It's life's at an end. I don't know what you meant by that exactly. Should it be it's life at an end? On a web so thin, Hangs an elephant ...

The little girl died? Horrible! But I loved the poem and it made me laugh. It teaches a wonderful lesson. Your rhyme is good, even with the few words that ...