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...wait, what? I'm not quite sure what's going on here. Obsidian starts off giving us a giant info dump of something which is incredibly crucial to the plot, indeed, the ...

Hi again knight dragon. The intro seems to be a very forced way to show Cayden has emotions, and Kira evidently looks up to him. Again, I am surprised at ...

Hey there knight dragon! This chapter is basically an info dump. You'd think Obsidian has already taken steps to ascertain what's going on, right? And you'd think they'd know what ...

Hey there knight dragon, I've been hearing a lot of you from Hannah, so I thought, as a fellow Knight, I'd drop by and give you a review! My first ...

Hi Stells! You know my name is Louis and you can guess that I will, in fact, be reviewing this right about now. You can probably also gather these two ...

Hi there NoirLumiere, my name is Louis and I will be reviewing this incredibly clichè, cheesy and lacking prologue! Right then, where to start from... First, I don't see why ...

Hi there santana! I am Louis and I will be reviewing this introduction. Let us first reflect upon prologues, or introductions, in general. I invite you to read this reply ...

Alright then, Louis here to review, as requested. I don't like jaded detectives. Why must all detectives be jaded, swear, and drink cheap alcohol? For once I'd like to see ...

And aha, at last, something we witness the first turn in Koretta's character development. She has finally decided that she will do something about the state her city is in, ...

Hey Empress, once again, Louis here to review. Killer first line. It's very powerful, drew me right in, kept me reading. Good job, it achieved what you wanted it to ...

I hate you (not really). I do, however, dislike when a prologue is used, then the first chapter is completely unrelated. It may be just a pet peeve, but it ...

hi there! I quite like the setting you described here, it's absolutely beautiful. I also like how gradually you introduced us to Sye, and the Cult. This is not an ...

Hi there, your ever-faithful Louis is here, to review this piece, as I have done with all the others, oh you may now be noticing an excessive use of commas, ...

Once again, this piece didn't deliver very well. Like before, you start a sentence and finish with another. Are you trying to convey that your character is not quite sane? ...

I don't know where to start. You really need to consider capitalization for one. After every full stop, capital letter. Yes, it is compulsory. You may also want to consider ...