Caesar

Hey there, this is rather long. Prospective reviewers will be scared away. Cut it into two parts. Many reviewers like to tackle shorter things. That said, I skimmed some bits. ...

Hey there. Your introduction post intrigued me to the point that I decided to check out if you'd posted anything, and, lo and behold, you did. Overall, this is pretty ...

Hey there. This is pretty flat. It's more as if I was reading some sort of essay. Is your narrator a machine? I assume they are human, and therefore has ...

never mind.

Hey there, welcome to yws. I don't understand that much about guns, and I don't feel like doing my research for you. That said, I'll assume you've accounted for the ...

Hey there, As I said below, this does not have a plot. This does not have a setting. This does not have interesting characters. We like romance between characters for ...

What just happened. She's pretty, she's throwing herself off a cliff, no wait she has a glider, no wait it breaks, there's a translucent man staring at her aaaand she's ...

This is at the very least interesting! I can't give a very solid critique because this is so short... why post an excerpt? Reviewing them is rather pointless. The scent ...

Why even bother showing us the end, without everything else? It defeats the point of... pretty much anything I can think of. I can't really express preference for a book ...

Well then. There are new characters introduced. From an apparently meaningless hostage situation at a diner in the previous chapter, we are now reading Call of Duty: Black Ops. There's ...

well alright then. Remember how I said you aren't capable of juggling multiple plot lines and characters? Here it's incredibly obvious. You dedicate one chapter to one, one to another, ...

First thing. Why, o why repeat the previous chapter? It's absolutely useless, it's not like we need to be reminded what we read two minutes ago. Ok, so, forget what ...

I'm not... sure... what's going... on...? Suddenly there are moderators, sages, and jesus christ Kira seems to have been completely forgotten. Turns out she's not the main character at all, ...

Ah come on, come on! How much more forced can you get? I agree with Pengi, Obsidian has been delivering false threats throughout this entire novel. He wouldn't kill the ...

Hrrrrm. Hey Knight Dragon, your faithful Louis is here to continue the reviewing spree. The first paragraph is again an info dump, albeit of a different nature. Instead of showing ...