Cade

Personally, I've never heard of the phrase 'automaton' before. And understanding that this is a poem about a robot is vital. Couldn't you use a different term (unless you're using ...

I edited the first line, and "automaton" is a fancy word for robot. Thanks! I knew what "automaton" meant...I'm just not sure how a robot fits into this whole "morning" ...

Oh, no...wait, where did the pretty French in the beginning go? I mean, I liked the English translation, but the French was so...authentic...

(Sheesh, Suzanne, why do you even bother? Your worthless words should not even be in the mere presence of my work. I hope your computer dies and you can't get ...

On the subject of cliche: "Cliche" does not necessarily mean "something we can all relate to." It means "tired, repetitive, meaningless because it's been in use forever, printed thousands of ...

I am a fan. *huggles A Wrinkle In Time*

Thanks for adding in the translation--it makes a lot of sense now and it's not so distracting for those of us who don't know any French. It's a neat idea, ...

I only have to say that one cannot compare words to women in makeup and call it even. True, if he tacked a meaning onto his words they would be ...

While still rough, perhaps this is a decent alternative. Also, not all poetry is meant to instruct Colleen, and beauty without meaning is beauty nonetheless. What is the point? I'm ...

Ahhh LizzyG; Cliches exist because they are so very relate-able to the human being ^.^ Thus while your poem may be a cliche it is merely because it selects and ...

*blushes like mad* Suzie, you are so good for my self-esteem...I actually was really nervous about posting this poem because I'd written it while my brain was beating itself up. ...

thx for the critiques, guys! for fand, the title was not meant to be "screaming". I just wrote it because I always title my poems/songs in capslock. but anyways, thx ...

Thanks guys! I meant it to be a dying diction--like the words are literally dying with all the words, lol. But will work on it. I had suspected it might ...

Did anyone think electric guitar was too overpowering. I've been listening to the track and it just seems so loud. But I'm a perfectionist... I thought the electric guitar was ...

WCW annoys me, but that's beside the point. Short structure does not have to equal lack of meaning. You fit a story into very few words, so congratulations. Now work ...