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Oh, yeah, thanks a bunch of dragging this piece of crap up again, jessiieeboo. I kid. Thanks for the comments, guys, though I don't even think this piece exists on ...

Made some capitalizations. Anymore than that, I'd be redefining a flashing arrow. :\ By "a flashing arrow," do you mean to say that the poem's message is obvious? As a ...

If you wanted another critique, you might have PMed someone with a link to the poem rather than asking in guestbooks. The rewrite is better, but it still suffers from ...

HAPPY! I completely adore this book. I like Lee favorite character is probably a tie between him and Sam Hamilton, but I like Cal a lot too.

BUt all the same, I couldnn't help but feel a little shocked. I think that's why it gets banned a lot...people are like, "Gasp, look how politically incorrect he is!" ...

It really is an analogy, not a story. And I'm definetely try to say something. Several things, in fact. I'm pleased that you didn't come out in the poem and ...

I based this poor attempt at a poem on a whole village (people included) preserved by lava. Like the volcano erupted engulfing the whole village and when the lave cooled, ...

For those not in the room at the time, this is a response piece to a poem by Stephen Mueske (not a terribly well-known poet, mind) entitled, "Lights." Hence "Lights" ...

im just a begginer so please bear with me my mom has bunders full of things like this and im just stretching my wings< jokeing... anyways i personally always like ...

Thanks for the advice! I'll do what I can without having to rewrite the whole thing. I'm not that good at this type of petry but I'll take out the ...

Haha, thanks guys. Wow, Ayra, I didn't expect to ever see this post revived. I think, gadi, that they are allowed to change. Sophistication in writing is often shown by ...

Do you have any ideas on how to make the conversations more interesting? Watch real people, and watch TV. Look at how people interact both in the real world and ...

Thanks, Heather, Gummy, and Kit. A line that seems a touch out of place is the one referring to grandma in the den. The rest of the poem rotates around ...

Revision posted 11-17. This is the first poem I ever posted on YWS, and eleven months later, I finally put up an edit. Niiiiice. Thanks for reviewing (ages ago) to ...

Hey guys, thanks for the comments! smorgishborg - I definitely see what you're saying about the piece being predictable. I thought the same thing myself, but I wasn't sure if ...