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Interesting subject. Not knowing all that much about the Bible, I can't really comment specifically on whatever references might be made here. As is often my complaint, this was too ...

I've never been a fan of repeating the title in the last line. It's too, well, erm, repetitive, and rarely sounds right. It seems especially out of place in your ...

I'm share Brad's feelings on the flower-love thing. As others have pointed out, good imagery, but I think that's most of what this poem has going for it. It actually ...

While using alliteration in that first line shows an ability to use literary techniques, I'm not sure it was really justified. As Trident pointed out, it seemed to be just ...

A Wrinkle in Time - Madeleine L'Engle Of course, that was a series, right? At least, I recall that books such as A Swiftly Tilting Planet and A Wind in ...

Now, I dislike Dickens, as many do, but he was a literary mastermind. If anything of his should go up there, it should be A Tale of Two Cities. To ...

East of Eden - John Steinbeck ^^DUH. Okay, so I just got into Steinbeck, so I haven't read a lot of his stuff yet, but East of Eden was truly ...

OMG YES The Perks of Being a Wallflower! That was pretty much the best thing in teen angst literature...ever. Not sure about the Da Vinci Code. It wasn't a great ...

Oooh, a prose-poem? I don't have much time for a proper crit here, but I want to say that I'd like to see this extended, perhaps, or at least go ...

Title it. Name your baby. In some places, I really liked the rhyme thing you had going - it was rather like performance poetry, and I think I'd like it ...

Back with a critique, however pathetic. *is not an un-critting loser* pacing feet -- It's been hours, now Hours since what? Also, I do believe the "it's" shouldn't be capitalized; ...

I agree with Cameron about the "child support" thing. I suppose this poem is pretty straightforward, and I enjoyed reading it. One thing that wasn't so great (this is more ...

Now, I'm going to sound awfully stupid here, but I'm having trouble...getting it. I've spent a little while looking at it, and it just hasn't spoken to me, and I'm ...

If in the subject description you meant "cliche", then yes, this is. It babbles cliches. I agree with Mad on the rhyming; couplets have a tendency to sound very childish ...

This was an enjoyable read. Most of it flowed very nicely and I liked the feeling that came with it. That said, there are very very few good Cummings imitations ...