Cade

I'm going to have to agree with Brad here. You have a lot of images here, a lot of words, but I'm still trying to find something more in it. ...

I second Misty on everything. I thought this was a fairly well-written piece. Characterization. The characterization of these the sister was excellent, but I saw very little of the narrator. ...

I find this piece interesting, but not exactly poetic. The phrases are blunt, commanding; they seem like more of a stream-of-consciousness, slightly edited rant than a poem to me. It's ...

Ah, I know how you feel. School starts for me on Wednesday. :( and :). Imagery. I think the strongest part of this piece is your ability to translate the ...

I, like Clau, am having trouble with this. I think I know why... Meaning. In order to get your point across, you've first got to give the reader something to ...

Oh, I like it! Grammar and sentence structure. I remember: it was either yesterday or eternities ago My opinion is that "eternity" should rarely be made plural. I think you ...

I felt the ending was a little too abrupt. I think that the length is appropriate, but this left me very unsatisfied. Meaning. I think this is fairly straightforward. Maybe, ...

*labels with a big red stamp*: EMO ANGST POETRY. I completely agree with Snoink, melodicatastrophe, and Meep here. Now, how can we work on making your poetry NOT sound like ...

The exaggerated description made me laugh, but other than that, this poem accomplishes very little. It contains few of the things good poetry ought to have. BUT it's okay to ...

I'm not really sure what to think of was enjoyable to read. I think you have a way with rhythm (I think of song lyrics) and an ability to create ...

I can't say I liked this as much as gummy, but I'm impressed by your imagery; it's lovely. The highway is a blur, rain-washed marker on a paper one shade ...

This certainly isn't your best work, but it sure ain't bad. I only have a few complaints: imprint on my soul This phrase makes me want to bang my head ...

It's clever that you worked in all the references to songs and bands, but as poetry, it's not really striking me as anything fantastic. It seems like you were working ...

I've seen a lot of your work springing up around here...remember that you ought to critique others' work as well as post your own. People will be more likely to ...

I can't say I liked this as much as Clau did...it's a little too straightforward and telling for my taste. Of course, a flat tone and straightforward manner add to ...