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Hey Lulu! Welcome to YWS. You might be better off not posting your poem in this centered format...it's frankly kind of childish, and might drive potential reviewers away. Before I ...

Hey Jack! You don't need to put your poem in a quote box...just leave it by itself in the post. Meaning. I'm not sure I understand the events being described ...

Suzanne, I hate you so much I'm going to...critique your poem. :D My main complaint is that, as is often the case with your poetry, that it's too prosaic. There's ...

Don't worry, Scarlett! The 'R' rating is appropriate. (And trust me, there have been much edgier things posted under 'R' ratings.) If you ever have a question about ratings, feel ...

Punctuation. I'm going to echo Leja's bit about the punctuation. Don't put commas at the end of line breaks unless they really belong! Write sentences as you would normally. For ...

Ooh, I do like this one. The voice is very comfortable, very charming. It sounds almost like I'm just listening to a next-door neighbor talk. I also love the twist ...

Charliebo - This is the Poetry forum, not the Debate forum. Most of your post was argumentative, not a please try to critique without debating! That said, the poem invited ...

*darts into Fiction forums like a bank robber, with a black ski mask pulled low over her eyes* Ooh, Sam, I do like this! I admit, I was a little ...

Heather. :D I really liked this. I think my main problem with it is that the images sometimes seem a little...careless. Like you needed something to put but didn't spend ...

It's cute and funny, so I think you've done your job! It's nice to read poetry on here that's not...*wristslash and shards* :) Your main problem is the rhythm. I ...

I started this poem not expecting to like it very much for some reason, but I really did. I think in the beginning I was confused, but after a re-read ...

This is the first day of my life, swear I was born right in the doorway...*sings* I like the idea behind this poem, and the way you've structured it, but ...

My first impression is that it's wordy, particularly in the last stanza, and melodramatic. I think a line-by-line critique is appropriate! :D We have not deserted our bloodied, beloved city. ...

This is more babble than a poem. What can you offer us besides the romantic ramblings of a teenage girl? You must make your reader care. What about this poem ...

Congratulations, you're the most recent recipient of one of my rare fiction critiques. Take a picture or something. Meaning and purpose. I almost feel as though I've read this piece ...