CSheperd

I thought it was great. I like reading anything to do with mortality, and this is the first thing i've read by anyone that handles the aspect of immortality well. ...

I had a pretty hard time following, everything was kind of jammed together. It was alot like thinking on ritalin

it lacked substance

it reminded me too much of a emo-ish twilight. A few words you were a little dependant on but that's not much of a problem. You have good style, but ...

It was a pretty good story. It really captured a childs perspective on bad dreams. The voice didnt really match the character all too well though, that is if your ...

it was a good story, you should've included the first part of your story too. I would've liked to seen more characterization other than the spoiler.

i thought it was a decent concept. There wasn't much to it though, put some meat on it's bones, dust it off and i'm pretty sure it'll be more enjoyable ...

Couldn't really grasp on it. It had great style to it though don't get me wrong, but even after readin the second piece to it still had difficulties. It just ...

Your poem had a very rythmic flow to it, it was very personal and expressed t's meanings very well.

It was good, you twist ended a poem good. It could flow a little better

I thought it was pretty good. It flowed pretty smoothly and had great rythm. I didn't really catch the theme though, but that just gives people something to think on. ...

I thought it was a pretty good poem, the imagery was subtle but the emotion was definitely tangible.

I thought it was pretty good, it offered a very amusing perspective to the shadier aspects of crime. Mark Twain meets the Good Fellas.

It was a very vague story and included details that fit pretty awkward in the rythm of the story. The plot could use some sharpening too.